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The Thief and The Holy Girl


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But Clom. Even thinking that the purest form of love is not acceptable is an unforgivable thoughtcrime and heresy, and for that I sentence you to 69 years of death through beheading. But since you've overcome embraced the temptations, you are completely forgiven and will be revered as the hero of the flower pond instead! Yay ^_^ =^.^=!

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On 3/17/2017 at 11:44 AM, KozmoFox said:

That's not necessarily a bad thing! Sometimes it is a good thing, like here.

Its refreshing to see something that isn't exclusively, you know

*pisses everywhere* oh nooo

I second that.

Sidenote: as a writer myself, I advise using the "show don't tell" method. That way, we can learn the history between the characters without you telling us. As a thought.

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Bit of a nitpick, but "apostate" refers to someone who renounces their religion. Might want to choose a different word. "Apostle" doesn't really work (generally used to describe individual prophets, not a religion as a whole), and the direct antonym, "loyalist", doesn't work either. Maybe "noble" or "divine" would fit better? Sorry, as a religious individual, I just had to point that out.

On topic, great story, love yuri.

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